Friday 29 April 2011

The Note

Velvet Verbosity's 100 Word Challenge - BATHED


His death hit me harder than I'd expected. Never close, we hadn't spoken in years. His inability to love could be summed up by any number of episodes from my childhood. But it wasn't isolated incidents that drove us apart. His detachment had become a constant theme of growing up. Successful at everything he did, he bathed in his own self-importance rather than immerse himself in the duties of fatherhood.

That he had been found hanged, shocked me. That the note they found in his pocket spoke of his failure at the only thing he'd ever cared about, broke me.

9 comments:

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  2. beautiful take on the prompt - heartbreaking, but beautiful.

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  3. Wow, very moving, so much said in only 100 words. Thank you for sharing this, and being part of this effort.

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  4. This is really really good. It tugged at me...

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  5. I can't...I don't...oh hell, I just don't have words. This was heart-shredding, tragic, and clearly well done because of those things.

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  6. OH wow...the sadness washed over me in waves while reading this. GREAT job!!!

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  7. Great story. So much in so few words. Well done.

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  8. great job. Congratulations on being vel's pick.

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  9. Thanks for the comments. And thanks and for the pick, VV.

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