Wednesday, 18 May 2011

Valentine's Day

Velvet Verbosity's 100 word Challenge - CHASM


Nothing, he thought, captured the sadness of the end of a relationship more than untouched plates at a dinner table. Surprisingly, she hadn't seen it coming. The tears, the anger, the weak little punches on his chest were testament to that. She'd seen the recent arguments as inconsequential. He'd seen them as symptomatic of the whole relationship -- not a temporary blip, but a deepening chasm. And he knew he'd been right to end it. But as he cleared the table, something about the lipstick on the rim of a still half-full wine glass made him stop and dial her number.

7 comments:

  1. oh . . . even when we know it is best to move on something just keeps pulling us back. Sort of the known is better than the unknown phenomenon maybe.

    thanks for sharing this piece.

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  2. oh, so sad...I always hate to hear of a relationship ending, even if it is for the best and perhaps fictional :)

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  3. I was drawn in from the first word, and I could imagine each moment happening as I read along. I enjoyed this :)

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  4. The heart & the brain are always at odds when it comes to relationships. That makes it so hard to let go even when it is the best thing to do.

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  5. It's hard to give up the familiar, even if you should. So much emotion, as well. Good job!

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  6. Somehow, I don't think this is going to end well.... very nicely done, thank you.

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  7. We're not wired to let go, that's my belief. Beautifully rendered, as always. So glad to have you on board.

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